November 29th, 2005
Sleeping Gods
Where the clouds cover the meadow green,
across the woods through the road unseen.
Leaving the footsteps on putrid leaves and pods,
I will take you to the world of sleeping gods.
Where scented wind play with your curly hair
and warm sunshine takes you away
from all the perils of life and dare
above from the limits of night and day.
There, will touch you, the hand of God,
then you’ll have no dangers nigh on you.
The starry and glossy and glittery moonlight
will wet your skin with the drops of dew.
There we will meet, with stars in the eyes,
will lie down under the blanket of skies.
With eyes closed and hands crossed,
I will take you to the world of sleeping gods.
- Chetna Pant
Kunal Goel says:
I think you should stick to Hindi poems.
November 30th, 2005 at 03:21 am
chetna says:
thanks ishan … kunal ,didn’t u like it?
November 30th, 2005 at 08:17 am
Kunal Goel says:
no, your hindi poems are better.
November 30th, 2005 at 02:03 pm
Nikunj says:
wonderful stuff hon…keep up the good work…by far, i feel, this is your best creation…and i feel that you have expressed the feelings beautifully in all your works, be in hindi or english…
December 1st, 2005 at 10:37 am
Ankur says:
Really good. Chetna I’m not really into writing & all that stuff but then reading ur work, I feel u really have got this god gifted talent. Just keep giving ur bird of thoughts with such beautiful wings of expression.
December 1st, 2005 at 10:54 am
gaurav says:
i m not qualified to comment on this, as this is really wonderfull work.
Gaurav
December 1st, 2005 at 11:03 am
chetna says:
thanks to u all.. m glad… ishan i m still waitin for ur comments…:evil:
December 1st, 2005 at 11:22 am
Kunal Goel says:
lol believe me you are not looking for ishan’s comment.
December 1st, 2005 at 03:06 pm
mark says:
i found the hapzarard rhyming distracting and the content cliche. im with kunal.
December 1st, 2005 at 03:06 pm
Amit says:
chetan its good ( but personally what i think first two paras are better than the last two) still keep up the good work.
December 1st, 2005 at 08:41 pm
Isaiah says:
i wud rather comment on the poem over the phone.
December 2nd, 2005 at 12:29 am
chetna says:
than call me…
December 2nd, 2005 at 08:09 am
Neha says:
I like the use of nature as a medium to all that you write, being a staunch environmentalist, i cant do anything but like it. The use of words is good. But really You write a lot better in Hindi. The idea you want to convey is beautiful but there is no consistency in the rhyming pattern. so i will totally have to agree with Kunal and Mark. My advice to you, dont attempt to rhyme. if it has to, it will come on its own. The attempt can be seen and that distracts one from the beauty of the thoughts.
December 2nd, 2005 at 11:10 am
chetna says:
ummmm….i will consider that..
December 2nd, 2005 at 02:57 pm
Amit says:
:!:neha liking and disliking something( especially writing) are not dependent on what u r.
December 3rd, 2005 at 12:28 am
Neha says:
Amit, I guess you havent met all the people in the world. you should try to. it could be a learning experience.
December 3rd, 2005 at 08:20 pm
Amit says:
learning:?:
December 3rd, 2005 at 10:32 pm
shambhu nath says:
Shreeman ji/shreemati ji
mai bhee sahitya premi hoo, our mai bhee hindi/bhoupuri me kavitaaye our geet likhataa hoo,
February 10th, 2006 at 09:30 am
Talia says:
a bit late to comment i guess… but just recently discovered this… i like the fluidity of the poem…. and the subject matter… special.
May 14th, 2006 at 12:59 am